Here is a revision of the draft I wrote earlier of the Somme poem. Changes are fairly minor. This is a first pass through the poem where I'm working on things that stand out. Mostly I'm deleting wordy or repetitive lines or phrases that are just not necessary. I was working the last line with an eye towards making the meter work well. This is all done by hand on a printed out draft, but I've made the changes in Word so that you can see them more clearly.