On the 100th anniversary of the Somme--first revision

Here is a revision of the draft I wrote earlier of the Somme poem.  Changes are fairly minor.  This is a first pass through the poem where I'm working on things that stand out.  Mostly I'm deleting wordy or repetitive lines or phrases that are just not necessary.  I was working the last line with an eye towards making the meter work well.  This is all done by hand on a printed out draft, but I've made the changes in Word so that you can see them more clearly.